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Some people say there are more disadvantages of a car than advantages. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #car
It is generally believed that whatever has advantages
also
 has disadvantages. It is a debated issue whether the pros outweigh the cons. I am of the opinion that advantages of
car
 outstrip the disadvantages. Recently a
car
 is known to become an article of dress. Without which a person feels incomplete. Cars are used to show affluence and in return people earn respect from it.
For instance
, imagine having a fleet of various models of exotic cars in your garage, people rate you as one of the wealthiest in the society.
Also
, some
tv
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TV
 shows have programs where peoples garage
are shown
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is shown
 with different cars in it. These people are highly regarded in the society.
Furthermore
, cars with its primary function of conveying people within a place and even to distant places have helped in solving transportation problem. People move about with ease with
this
 great invention. It is
also
 one of the cheapest means of transportation and carries a limited number of passengers.
However one
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However, one
 of the major problems of
motor
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a motor car
the motor car
car
 is air
pollution which
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pollution, which
 is known to be among the causes of global warming.
This
 problem has been put
on
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in
 check by the production of modified engines that produces less combustion and the manufacture of electric cars that do not need any sort of fuel
thus
 emission is totally avoided. In conclusion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 pen
down saying
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down, saying
 that the pros of
car
 outweigh the cons.
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