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Should private schools receive government funding: Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

#schools #government
With the increasing number of private institutions, it becomes pertinent to determine whether
government
 ought to extend
finances
Suggestion
financing
 to privately owned educational institutions. I am of the opinion that public funds should not be made available to private institutions, but rather, be best put to use in developing other sectors of the country. To start with,
financing private
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financing, private
 schools with public funds means additional funds must be provided by the
government
,
consequently
, leading to more financial burden and poor standard of living of the masses. To illustrate
further
, a developing country like Nigeria, with
low
Suggestion
lower
 revenue, would have to cut short on its budget to other sectors of the economy. Sectors
such
 as Healthcare and Security may be subjected to poor management and inefficiency
as a result
 low funding. The overall effect
is
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is, therefore
therefore
, a low living standard of the populace.
In addition
, the current dilapidated state of many public institutions coupled with
poor learning environment
Suggestion
a poor learning environment
 is bound to be on the increase if
government
Suggestion
the government
deem
Suggestion
deems
 it fit to make funds available to private schools. In the past, public schools pride themselves in breeding elites in the society by giving world-class tutoring.
For example
, Queen's college and Mayflower school in Nigeria, to mention a few, were known to dominate and lead other schools in competitions and
conversely
, produce world leaders. These high standards have long deteriorated
as a result
 of low funding and will
furthermore
, suffer greater damage if public funds are channeled towards privately owned schools. In conclusion,
government
 should be concerned with improving the living standard of the people by making funds available to develop public sectors and institutions rather than financing private schools.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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