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Some people think that everyone has the right to have access to university education and that the government should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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It is considered by many that providing free
university
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education
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 to all
students regardless
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students, regardless
 of their financial condition is a crucial right of every student.
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, I completely disagree with
this
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 viewpoint. In the following paragraphs I will discuss that free
university
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education
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 has a negative Impact on
government
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 and students.
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, if
government
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 continues
providing
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to provide
 higher
education
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 without imposing any fees, certain underdeveloped countries may face financial crisis in the long run. Governments need a large amount of
money
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 every year to run universities. A great amount of
money
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 they spend
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most
 on constructing new buildings, teachers' salary, research. To manage
money
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, each
year low
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year, low
 income countries will have to depend on different sources
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 as NGO, World Bank.
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, these nations often borrow
money
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 from that
types
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type
 of organisations on difficult terms and at high interest rate.
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, many states are likely to face bankruptcy.
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, Free higher
education
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 encourages parents to send their children to universities, which has a negative effect on their children in their later life. Almost all the students get admitted to
university
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 after they pass higher secondary level with a view to getting an admissible certificate.
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, after completing their graduation, most of them do not get their desired jobs.
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,
government
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can not
can not
cannot
 create enough jobs for a majority of fresh graduates.
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, certain graduates become disappointed and lose their hope, which stifles the progress of their country.
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, Most Algerian universities are run by governments and students are required to pay
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at
 least amount of
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.
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,
although
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 the number of educated people has increased considerably, the unemployment rate is growing substantially. To conclude, despite the fact that free
university
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education
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 is essential for every student to secure a highly-paid job, it has certain drawbacks both
on
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of
government
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 and students.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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