3. Environmental problems are serious in many countries. It means that the only possible way to protect the environment is at an international level. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

The detrimental effects of environmental is quite grave not only at national
level
but to the whole
world
. Many awful
problem
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problems
persist in the global village
such
as
world
. A lion’s share of society
suggest
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suggests
it is only possible at governmental
level
.
However
, I would disagree with
this
statement. Country and country make the whole
world
. And
whole
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the whole world
world
is facing global climatic change and environmental problems.
First
of all, we cannot deny that the role of the bureaucrats and social international organizations are prime here as compared to individual citizen here. The program event they conduct at large scale required
large sum
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large sums
a large sum
of money in order to combat with
this
climatic
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climate
change
problems
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problem
.
Secondly
, the foreign association and government bodies together can create a profound impact in maintaining the industrial area where pollutions are at
extreme
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extreme levels
an extreme level
the extreme level
level
.
For instance
, a survey conducted by
world
environment suggested that the pollutions in
certain geographic region
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certain geographic regions
a certain geographic region
already surpassed 80% which is very detrimental and should be stopped.
However
, individual concern in order to fight back with
this
problem cannot be neglected. All individual know
this
problem quite well. If an individual can switch
of
from a particular thing or place or position
off
the light when not in use, we can imagine
this
impact at
global
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the global level
a global level
level
.
In addition
, if people stopped using the plastic and other products which causes a lot of
issues
Accept comma addition
issues, then
then
the company would have to produce the products
such
as eco-friendly. In a gist, governmental and international body would create
profound impact
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a profound impact
in combatting the
world
’s environment problems.
However
, individual concern cannot be neglected.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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