The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in the society? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is believed that many individuals persist in
smoking
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smoking, although
although
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they are aware of the hazards of
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.
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is due to societal
pressure
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and
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can be reduced by introducing
an
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a
higher tariff on the
product
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. Societal
pressure
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is one of the major contributors to smoking. Most people want to feel and belong in certain social class and
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makes them involve themselves in
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vice. In a recent survey conducted by World health organization 60% of the youths in Nigeria today are either smoking or involved in drugs due to peer
pressure
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.
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, I recently came across some young teens in a restaurant in
lekki
a body of (usually fresh) water surrounded by land
lake
smoking
tobacco
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and walked up to them to
advice
give advice to
advise
them about the dangers of smoking.
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, another contributor is experimentation. Most of the chain smokers started out with experimenting and most times get hooked and become addicted.
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, a recent survey in Northern Nigeria indicates that 80 percent of the youth got into smoking through experimentation. Smoking in the society can be reduced by
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putting
an
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a
higher tariff on the
product
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.
That is
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, when an individual
want
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wants
to purchase the
product
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he would be charged the price
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of
the cigarettes or
tobacco
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and an additional 50 percent VAT on the
product
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,
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would discourage the individuals from purchasing it.
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, they should be a ban on advert of the
product
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. Television, social media and the media in general should be made to stop any advert promoting the sale of cigarettes or
tobacco
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on air. To conclude, smokers get addicted to
tobacco
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and cigarettes by experimenting and
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through societal
pressure
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and
this
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can be reduced by making the price of
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product
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high and placing a ban on advertising the
product
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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