A lot of places on the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that benefits of tourism outweighs its drawback?

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Many
country
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's main revenue generation is from
tourism
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. Regrettably, problems can arise from mismanaged
tourism
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. Asides the fact that not all tourists are credible, some of them end up staying back and
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, causing an increase in population.
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,
tourism
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enriches the nation by bringing development which attracts foreign investors.
Tourism
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can have a negative effect on a
country
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, in the sense that some of the visitors might have criminal tendencies.
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, some convicts may run away from their countries and disguise as tourists in another
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.
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will result to a high crime rate in the
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.
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, some tourists do not leave at the stipulated time. With
this
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increase in population comes overcrowding and poor standard of living.
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, a recent survey in India revealed that 50% of the children in public schools belonged to
parents
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the parents
who came
in as tourists
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as tourists
. So the citizens will be at the receiving end.
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,
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has been a blessing to many nations.
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the obvious fact that its a great revenue booster, it
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brings about
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the development
and popularity of the
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, developed countries are known to attract investors.
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, studies
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have shown
that people put their money more in projects that they are certain will earn profit,
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, projects in developed countries.
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will in
turn enrich
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turn, enrich
the nation greatly. In conclusion, in as much as
tourism
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may have brought
increase
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an increase
in crimes and overcrowding, I believe it has done more good than harm. As it brings about the
developed
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development
developments
developmental
developer
and popularity of a
country
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