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Band 6.5

You recently read about a volunteer opportunity overseas. Write a letter to the head of the organisation. In your letter: discuss what you know about the programme · explain why you are interested in the opportunity describe what skills you would bring to the position

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing with regard to a recent voluntary position available in Canada. I read in the newspaper that every year all over Canada Tim
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 raise funds for children on Camp Day by merchandising some of their items on stalls, and money collected from that purchase is donated to organize camps for children from low-income families. I have a keen interest in helping others whenever possible,
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in my own country India, I participate in various voluntary positions in schools, colleges, and universities, and when I came across
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 volunteer camping position to raise funds, I was extremely delighted. Regarding the skills, I mentioned that I have participated in numerous voluntary positions,
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 I possess some of the qualities of caring and helping other people. In
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 I would be able to attract people to purchase more goods
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 my friendly communication skills. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Sakshi Syal

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task achievement
Try to further elaborate on how participating in such events in India has prepared you for this role in Canada.
coherence cohesion
You may want to include more explicit connections between your past volunteering experiences and how they exactly fit this opportunity.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are properly structured, polite, and formal, which is suitable for a letter of this nature.
task achievement
The letter is concise, and the writing tone is appropriate, maintaining a respectful and interested voice throughout.
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