Earlier technological developments were more beneficial and changed the lives of the ordinary people than recent technology ever will. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Older advancements in technology were more efficient and it transformed the lives of the ordinary people than current technology will. In my opinion

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completely disagree with

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assertion as they were very slow and it required more expertise to carry out

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A major reason why the electronic gadgets used in the olden days were not productive was because they were not fast in delivering. To

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explain, when a message is to be delivered, before it is processed and taken to the intended recipient, a lot of time would have been spent

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thereby delaying the purpose of the message

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when delivery was to be done using Postal box, two weeks to one month should have gone by, before the message is delivered.

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made it ineffective. Another important point to consider is that most of the employers required a lot of trainings to perform their duties.To

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simplify, due to the low literacy level seen at the time, most of the workers were not able to discharge their duties effectively.

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stalled their performance

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in operation during the early 1900's, needed a lot of trained personnels to be able to operate It. Because people were not literate enough it

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it led to

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decline in the rate of technological use

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To conclude, previous advances in technology never yielded a good outcome more than

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as the older system had need of hands on trainings to handle its activities and it was unreliable.

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Earlier technological developments were more beneficial and changed the lives of the ordinary people than recent technology ever will. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

A group of people think that the penalty for each kind of crime needs to equal, another group says that before giving punishment wants to analyse the stimulantt and motivation of the crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment. Only large companies and goverments can make a difference. What extent do you agree or disagree.

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Other say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Disucss both these view and give your own opinions.

Some people claim that museums and art galleries are not needed today because everyone can see historical objects or art works by computer. To what extent do you agree or disagree?