Nowadays, more people are choosing to socialize online rather than face to face. Is this a positive or negative development?

An increasing number of people meet and talk to their friends online
instead
of in person. In my opinion,
this
is negative development which can lead to isolation, potentially harmful situations and
also
problems later on in life. One serious problem that can arise from people socializing online is that it can lead to isolation. Before the internet, people would frequently go out to meet friends,
for
example in
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example, in
cafes, bars or restaurants, whereas now people prefer to stay at home alone, chatting online.
As a result
, people are starting to spend the majority of their time alone at home in their room without meeting others.
Isolation
Suggestion
The isolation
of
this
kind is not healthy and can sometimes lead to depression and other issues. Another issue is that meeting people online can be risky.
In other words
, people can assume fake identities online as well as hide their true characteristics.
This
is particularly concerning for teenagers who are impressionable and can
easy
Suggestion
easily
be led into dangerous situations.
Furthermore
, as
this
interaction is online, parents have no way of monitoring it and protecting their children.
Finally
. Socializing online can end in difficulties years later as conversations and shared photos that had been forgotten reappear.
This
situation is currently critical for many people, again especially for teenagers who do not think carefully before posting online,
That is
to say, information which is put online can remain there forever and while people may share intimate communications with close friends, these words can
then
resurface later on leading to much embarrassment. In conclusion,
although
it has become more popular for people to socialize through the internet, it has brought about too many problems for
this
to be considered a positive trend.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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