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Some people believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of it outweigh the disadvantages?

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There is a worldwide tendency to know more than one
language
 for professional success. Some people argue that a foreign
language
 should be introduced to children as early as at primary
school
, while others claim that
this
 should happen at secondary
school
. I will discuss both views before drawing a conclusion. The main reason why some people want a new
language
 to be introduced
at
Suggestion
in
 primary
school
 is a belief that children under ten years old learn new languages faster.
For example
, a child of my friend learnt French during
first
 two years of primary
school
, and by the end of the
second
 year he became a fluent speaker. Unlike more senior learners, he progressed much faster and secured a place in a French summer
school
 when he was eight years old. It is well known that fluency in a foreign
language
 opens many doors to
further
 education and, as a consequence, to a future career.
Furthermore
, children who are fluent in more than one
language
 by the end of primary
school
 can continue their education in secondary
school
 abroad. Among those who insist on introduction to a new
language
 only at secondary
school
, there is an opinion that workloads on primary students are already high. They claim that children under ten years old should have more spare time, and a new
language
 could be learnt later, even though the progress in learning can be slower than that at primary
school
.
However
, I tend to disagree with
this
 opinion because more subjects are started in secondary
school
. In conclusion, there are more reasons
to begin
 learning a new
language
 in primary
school
 as it opens more educational opportunities at an early age, while postponed
language
 course only delays the progress. I
also
 believe that the workloads placed on primary
school
 students
can be adjusted not
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can not be adjusted
 by the expense of important subjects like a foreign
language
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Pronunciation
  • Fluency
  • Brain plasticity
  • Cultural awareness
  • Globalized world
  • Proficiency
  • Educational opportunities
  • Motivation
  • Resource constraints
  • Specialized teachers
  • Academic pressure
  • Parental involvement
  • Curriculum balance
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