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1.Some people think that there should be some strict controls about noise. Others think that they could just make as much noise as they want. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In
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 is becoming a huge factor of concern for every single creature on
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 earth. Some individuals believe that there should be some restrictions on producing
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 others think that
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 could make as per their desires.
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 my perspective, humans can make
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 but there should be some limits
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 the place and events.
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 as much as they want. The first and foremost reason is sometimes excessive
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 works as a stress buster.
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, After work at my
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 I Personally prefer to sing loudly because it calms my brain from the office stuff.
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, Individuals love to entertain themselves with loud music on special occasions
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 as weddings and anniversary parties. So,
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 could make
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 as per their celebrations or mood.
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, everything in excess has its detrimental effects too. Seniors can have health issues with exorbitant
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.
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 might lose their auditory senses
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 and old ones can suffer from problems like unstable blood pressure as well.
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, unbearable
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 can affect students too as they will not be able to concentrate on their studies if it has loud
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 in their residential area.
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, if a person is living near a banquet hall, it would definitely affect his/her studies because of the music. In conclusion, both views have their merits and demerits. I firmly believe that humans should have no need to be quiet and
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 should not be prohibited
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people
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 should know at what time or at what occasion
noise
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 is OK and where
noise
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 should be restricted.

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task achievement
Ensure the introduction clearly outlines the main points to be discussed in the essay, which will provide a better roadmap for the reader.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use a wider range of cohesive devices (e.g., ‘in addition’, ‘furthermore’, ‘on the contrary’) to enhance the flow of ideas between sentences and paragraphs.
task achievement
When presenting your opinion, reiterate it clearly in the conclusion to reinforce your stance and ensure it aligns with the arguments made in the body.
task achievement
The essay presents a balanced discussion of both views before sharing personal opinion, demonstrating an understanding of the task requirements.
task achievement
The use of examples to support points made (such as personal experiences and societal events) adds authenticity and relatability to the argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • noise pollution
  • quality of life
  • noise levels
  • stress
  • disturb sleep
  • imposing legal restrictions
  • peaceful living environment
  • tolerance levels
  • personal freedom
  • business operations
  • designated quiet zones
  • commercial and industrial zones
  • urban areas
  • public awareness campaigns
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