Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child’s success in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people think that school friends give more influence to a
child
’s success
than parents. Although
the existence of friends has some positive effect, I personally believe that parents give more significant effect to the child
’s success
.
It is undeniable that classmates play a pivotal role in a child
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child's
success
, as friends could help each other. One of the examples is when a child
does not understand a lesson, he could ask a help from his friends. And then
, when a child
joins a sports competition, his friends might support him and give him encouragement. Despite all the positive sides, they could also
bring negatives
things as well. Suggestion
negative
For instance
, one of the classmates might be addicted to drugs, and he could influence the others to use it.
Many people believe that parents have more significant contributions to a child
’s academic study than classmates. Even though they might not be giving technical advice to the child
, but they give moral support. For example
, a child
might have some difficulties with his exam and has to study until late at night, his parents might give some motivational words that inspire him, and also
stay awake to accompany the child
. And then
, parents will also
provide all funds needed for the improvement of the child
’s academic study. For instance
, a child
might have some problems with mathematics, and the parents might hire a private tutor for their child
.
In conclusion, I do agree that school friends have some positive effect on a child
’s academic performance, but I do not agree if people think that classmates give more important influence than parents. I believe that parents play more vital
roles in a Suggestion
most vital
child
’s success
, as they give moral and financial support.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite