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The world would be a better place if we all spoke the same language. Do you agree?

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As the world becomes more interconnected with the growth of the internet and cheaper travel, it is important to examine of a universal
language
. There are benefits in terms of travel and business, but a common
language
 threatens a
loss
 of
culture
 and identity.
Firstly
, a common
language
 would mean there are no
language
 barriers. Travelling to different countries would be easier and more convenient. In
business there
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business, there
 would be less danger of misunderstandings.
Furthermore
, in situations of conflict where there are soldiers from different countries, it would be easier for them to work together if they all spoke one
language
.
However
,
this
 would mean that the
loss
 of all other languages as they become unnecessary.
Language
 is tied to
culture
. Through speaking a
language
, one is showing cultural history and identity.
Moreover
, the way
language
 changes
reflects
Suggestion
reflect
 both the history of a society and the current
culture
.
Loss
 of a
language
 means the
loss
 of an important part of a
culture
.
Additionally
, there is evidence that shows that
language
 is linked to how people think. People who speak multiple languages alter their thought process when they change
language
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the language
. The entire world speaking one
language
 would mean people thinking in the same way, threatening future development and invention. In conclusion,
although
 a universal
language
 might make the world easier in terms of cooperation, it would not be a better place. It would mean the
loss
 of
culture
, identity and ways of thinking. In the long term, theses losses
aare
a unit of surface area equal to 100 square meters
are
or
 greater than the benefits.
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