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Some people believe that eventually all jobs will be done by artificial intelligence (AI) robots. What is your opinion?

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In
this
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 era of smart technology some people are concerned that sooner or later the artificially
intelligent
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Intelligent
 programs and machines will take care of all the jobs which are now done by humans. In
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 context, I believe, on one hand, not all but a big portion of the jobs will be done by artificially enhanced machines,
on the other hand
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, lots of new jobs will be created simultaneously that requires
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the human touch
a human touch
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 essay will discuss why all the jobs will not be taken over by robots. The robots or computer programs will mostly replace the repetitive and structured jobs. Jobs
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 as data entry, listing and filing office works, order fulfilling, answering calls, creating work schedules etc. non-decision making and mundane, but very structured jobs will be replaced by machines to reduce cost and enhance productivity.
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, Amazon UK has created several smart retail stores without any cashier by making the payment completely online and automated.
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, artificially intelligent machines will hopefully take care of these unskilled to semi-skilled jobs that do not demand any strategic decision making or complex thought process.
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 there are still so many jobs that demands emotional intelligence that only a human being can provide. To accomplish numerous
jobs human
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jobs, human
 touches,
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 as using gut feeling or intuition to make decisions, interpersonal skills, negotiation skills and other emotional attributes are needed that cannot be completed by robots.
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, to convince a client to close a business deal in good terms needs a physical human being, where good interpersonal skills and some specific emotional intelligence come
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 play which the machines would never be able to replace.
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, many new jobs will be created in
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the future
, which will need more human feelings and emotions to get the works done properly. In conclusion, I believe, on one hand, many routine and too much repetitive jobs will be lost to the robots. While a lot of other jobs are there and many more will be created where a human participation and emotional intellect are a paramount to get it done.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Artificial Intelligence (AI)
  • Automation
  • Workplace automation
  • Human intuition
  • Job displacement
  • Collaborative robots (Cobots)
  • Skill adaptation
  • Ethical considerations
  • Economic implications
  • Fully automated workforce
  • Human-machine collaboration
  • Technological advancements
  • Creative industries
  • Empathy
  • Socio-economic impact
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