Smacking or punishing children is the best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

These days disciplining
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children
is a headache for
parents
. Many of the
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further
resort to smacking as a common practice to control their offspring.
However
, I absolutely discourage
such
violent activity towards kids. In
this
essay, the adverse impacts of spanking or punishing
children
will be discussed in detail. Using punishment as a tool to straighten up the
children
is quite common and
this
has been in practice for centuries. It is true that
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resorting to spanking or beating up kids will generate instant results.
However
,
this
instant gratification of discipline
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deep scars in the tender minds of these
children
, which can have
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impact on their behaviour, when they become
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.
For instance
, several studies have proven that
this
kind of childhood trauma can cause clinical depression, make
children
unsocial and in a
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scenario, make them violent toward others.
Hence
, the
parents
should be careful about how they control their offspring.
Now a day
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,
parents
are usually busy with their jobs to support the family.
This
situation makes the
children
turn into little attention seekers,
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a result, they become annoying to the
parents
. But if the
parents
get tired of their
children
’s behaviour and smack them to discipline, it will be very bad for the child and hurt their feelings in a brute manner. The
children
may slowly shut down to their
parents
which will create detachment with the
parents
.
Therefore
, it will make the
children
less confident, unsocial and
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in some cases. In conclusion,
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against any sort of physical violence toward
children
in order to let them grow as confident and social human beings.
Therefore
, I believe, smacking cannot be a plausible option to discipline and raise
children
. Rather we should raise them with love and care, and shower them will
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attention that they need.
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