More and more people are suffering from health problems caused by a modern life style which cannot be treated with modern medicines. Some people think that a return to traditional medicines should be encouraged. To what extent do you agree?
Today’s diet consumption is affecting humans in terms of health and
this
number is increasing day by day and also
, the solution is not coming from these scientific pills. It is believed by some individuals that traditional medicines
should be allowed to cure patients. I completely disagree because old-style medicines
are not manufactured with proper care and their action of curing is slow as compared with modern tablets. Herbal medicines
needs
time to cure the patient from diseases. The pace of killing infections is quite slow as linked with modern Change the verb form
need
medicines
and sometimes it cost
the life of an individual. Wrong verb form
costs
Which
makes the situation worsen, Correct pronoun usage
This
thus
consuming such
medicine is not full
proof of improving health in a timely manner. Correct word choice
apply
For instance
, homeopathy medicines
require 1 week to control the
nasal infections Correct article usage
apply
such
as common
cold as Correct article usage
the common
compare
with modern Wrong verb form
compared
medicines
which require only one day. Traditional medicines
are not prepared in scientific
manner Change the article
a scientific
besides
bringing them back for the
treatment Correct article usage
apply
purpose
can create more problems. These Fix the agreement mistake
purposes
medicines
are not manufactured under proper hygiene practices, thus
they possess
Verb problem
pose
risk
of infections, and Add an article
the risk
a risk
therefore
the authority should not encourage traditional medicines
in the market. Only few
Correct article usage
a few
authority
permit the use of Fix the agreement mistake
authorities
such
medicines
around the globe. In conclusion, although
advanced treatments fail sometimes in recovering patients, but
the impact of consuming old-date medicine by patients Remove the conjunction
apply
on
getting better is even Change preposition
apply
slow
and poorer. Replace the word
slower
In addition
to that, these medicines
are not prepared according to
the science
law. Replace the word
scientific
Hence
, I believe that we should not encourage people to consume traditional medicines
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