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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Globally, tertiary education is on the rise.
This
has raise
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has raised
 an eyebrow on universities accepting the same
number
 of
both
 sexes in all courses. In my view, I agree to the aforementioned owning to the fact that they would be less envy and jealousy.
To begin
 with, when a tertiary institution has
equal
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an equal number
number
 of
both
 sexes,
non
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no-one
 of the gender would feel cheated in all ramification.
This
 means that in terms of quiz in a subject; when
been
the state or fact of existing
being
 separated
acording
(followed by 'to') in agreement with or accordant with
according
 to their gender, there is
this
 feeling of
satisfacation
the contentment one feels when one has fulfilled a desire, need, or expectation
satisfaction
 within and
this
 would
triger
lever that activates the firing mechanism of a gun
trigger
both
 male and female students to work hard in order to
out shine
shine brighter than
outshine
 the opposite sex. Another point to consider is that it would boost the financial state of the school.
This
 is because, most people would prefer a university that offer admission to equal
number
 of male and female,
as a result
 of
this
, students would like to be enrolled
into
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in
such
 institution; thereby boosting the financial strength of the institution.
Okpanma
 university is a prime example; as
at
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of
 2005, the university had 500
students but
Accept comma addition
students, but
 after they considered offering admissions to equal gender in each department, it rose to 1 million students as at March 2019. In conclusion, evidently from the points outlined, it is explicit that accepting
equal
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an equal number
number
 of
both
 genders in a course would
imbide
fix or set securely or deeply
embed
impede
imbibe
 in the students the zeal to study hard as to
out shine
shine brighter than
outshine
 their opposite sex.
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