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Smacking children is the best form of discipline. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

#children #form #discipline
These days, controlling the children is very difficult. Many people
spank
Suggestion
Spank
 children as they think
this
 is the best
way
 of discipline.
This
 essay will argue why smacking is completely unacceptable and not the best form of discipline. Many parents believe that spanking children is the right
way
 to keep them in
control
 because they may make mistakes which they are not aware of it. By doing
this
, they will be more cautious. They are justifiably worried about their children making mistakes which puts both of them in trouble.
On the other hand
,
some
Suggestion
Some
 people think that the traditional
way
 of controlling children is the finest. A recent study done by the professor at the university of California states that "90 percent of the parents smack their children" to
control
 them. There have been some recorded instances in
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
, where they use
this
 orthodox approach to the children in order to avoid
doing
the act that results in something coming to be
making
 mistakes.
Therefore
, they think beating is the only
way
 to
control
 their children. On the other side, there are many down side of doing
this
. I understand why they do
this
,
however
, it is spreading a negative
vibes
Suggestion
vibe
 across
community
Suggestion
the community
communities
a community
. One of the main effect is that, if children got an exposure to violence at an early age it will impact their mind.
For instance
, a person at new York was arrested and he states that "he was experienced to violence by their parents" that became him today. There are many ways to
control
 them
for example
, by abusing or shouting to keep them in
control
.
Therefore
, spanking is not the best
way
.
This
 essay argued why spanking children is completely unacceptable and not the best form of discipline. In my opinion, I totally disagree as that would affect them in their future.
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