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Some teachers think that international student exchange would be beneficial for all teenage school students. Do you think its advantages will outweigh the disadvantages?

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Many mentors hold the view that cross-cultural exchange program would bring advantageous benefit to all
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student
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students
. From my perspective, disadvantageous though
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 program can be, I totally admit that the benefit is much more significant. On the one hand, oversea
student
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 is likely to experience some difficulties to some extent. In
term
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terms
 of
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finances
financial
financing
finance
, a cross-border is tend to be much prohibitively expensive than domestic
cources
education imparted in a series of lessons or meetings
courses
causes
coaches
.
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,
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student
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the student
a student
students
 must bear the burden of working part-time to share with their parent, leading to reduce their entire concentration
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of
 study. Another
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obstacle
 is cultural shock. Exchange
student
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 might struggle with cultural dissimilarities to adapt
a
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an
 utterly
diffent
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
 environment. Meanwhile, they are prone to be homesick and isolated, leading to
underiable
not wanted
undesirable
 academic outcomes.
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, they get
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 merits than
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a drawback
drawbacks
. Having taken part in
exchange program
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the exchange program
an exchange program
exchange programs
, they stand a golden chance to get a deeper insight into a culture and have
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a favourable environment
 to improve their foreign language skills which serves as a stepping-stone for their future job.
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, thanks to a period of learning oversea which shines the
student
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's resume, there is more likely for
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exchange students
an exchange student
student
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 to attract employer's attention especially in our degree-based society. In conclusion, in spite of facing with managing costly budgets, the positive aspects
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 programme bring to
student
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 are well-worth the cost.
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