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Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discussion both these views and give your own opinions.

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A problem of modern societies is the declining level of health in the general population with conflicting views on how to tackle
this
 worrying trend. One possible solution is to provide more sports facilities to encourage a more active lifestyle. Advocates of
this
 believe that today’s sedentary lifestyle and stressful working conditions mean that physical activity is no longer part of either our work or our leisure time. If there were easy to-reach local sports centres, we would be more likely to make exercise a regular part of our lives, rather than just collapsing in front of a screen every evening. The variety of sports that could be offered would cater for all ages, levels of fitness and interests: those with painful memories of PE at school might be happier in the swimming pool than on the football pitch.
However
, there may be better ways of tackling
this
 problem. Interest in sport is not universal and additional facilities might simply attract the already fit, not those who most need them. Physical activity could be encouraged by installing exercise equipment in parks as my local council has done.
This
 has the added benefit that parents and children often use them together just for fun, which develops a positive attitude to exercise at an early age. As well as physical activity, high tax penalties could be imposed high-fat food products, tobacco and alcohol, as excessive consumption of any of these
contributes
Suggestion
contribute
 to poor health. Even improving public transports would help as it takes longer to walk to the bus stop than to the car. In my opinions, focusing on sports facilities is too narrow an approach and would not have the desired results. People should be encouraged not only to be more physically active but
also
 to adopt a healthier lifestyle in general.
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