Some people think that the government should be responsible for crime prevention, while others believe that it is the responsibility of the individual to protect themselves. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

It is highly sensitive and debatable issue about who is responsible to reduce the criminal activities
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authorities or citizens.
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essay shades some light on prime responsibilities of mankinds as well as
government which
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government, which
is followed by my opinion.
To begin
with
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crime rate
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the crime rate
has proliferated all around the world.The major factor behind criminal activities in
first
world countries is the unemployment.
In addition
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to earn money
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youngsters influence
themselves
objective case of they
them
to do unethical activities
such
as smuggling because of inadequate job opportunities.
Hence
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authority
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the authority
should try to create jobs.Apart from
this
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to take safety measures against
crime
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government
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the government
can allocate more amount of budget to improve security systems in a
perticular
unique or specific to a person or thing or category
particular
area.To exemplify
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authority should try to cover each and every part of a region by CCTV cameras and monitor them for 24*7.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
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people can sleep peacefully.
Moreover
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government
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the government
should deploy more
policeforce
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police force
for
petrolling
a detachment used for security or reconnaissance
patrolling
in sensitive areas where the probability of criminal activity is high.
For example
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government
of Delhi has increased the number of policemen at night
petrolling
a detachment used for security or reconnaissance
patrolling
after a heinous rape case reported in 2016.
As a result
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the
crime
rate has declined because of awareness of
authorities
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the authorities
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some people blame that
inhabitants
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the inhabitants
are responsible to reduce crimes.
However
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people can only rely on self defence in order to protect themselves and Korea knows
this
very well because it is mandatory to take training
of
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on
self defence
such
as karate and taekwondo
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whereas
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In India
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where the awareness of self defence is not good
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people can take tools which help them to protect
theirselves
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
like pepper spray. To conclude
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It is irresolute to say that whose responsibility is to prevent antisocial activities.I opine that
government
and people both have to assimilate and contribute equally to reduce the
crime
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