Some people think that the government should be responsible for crime prevention, while others believe that it is the responsibility of the individual to protect themselves. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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It is highly sensitive and debatable issue about who is responsible to reduce the criminal activities

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authorities or citizens.

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essay shades some light on prime responsibilities of mankinds as well as

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government which

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government, which

is followed by my opinion.

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with

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crime rate

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the crime rate

has proliferated all around the world.The major factor behind criminal activities in

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world countries is the unemployment.

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to earn money

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youngsters influence

themselves

objective case of they

them

to do unethical activities

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as smuggling because of inadequate job opportunities.

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authority

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the authority

should try to create jobs.Apart from

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to take safety measures against

crime

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government

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the government

can allocate more amount of budget to improve security systems in a

perticular

unique or specific to a person or thing or category

particular

area.To exemplify

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authority should try to cover each and every part of a region by CCTV cameras and monitor them for 24*7.

to a very great extent or degree

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people can sleep peacefully.

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government

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the government

should deploy more

policeforce

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police force

for

petrolling

a detachment used for security or reconnaissance

patrolling

in sensitive areas where the probability of criminal activity is high.

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government

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of Delhi has increased the number of policemen at night

petrolling

a detachment used for security or reconnaissance

patrolling

after a heinous rape case reported in 2016.

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the

crime

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rate has declined because of awareness of

authorities

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the authorities

. On contrary

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some people blame that

inhabitants

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the inhabitants

are responsible to reduce crimes.

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people can only rely on self defence in order to protect themselves and Korea knows

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very well because it is mandatory to take training

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self defence

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as karate and taekwondo

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whereas

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In India

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where the awareness of self defence is not good

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people can take tools which help them to protect

theirselves

reflexive form of "them"

themselves

like pepper spray. To conclude

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It is irresolute to say that whose responsibility is to prevent antisocial activities.I opine that

government

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and people both have to assimilate and contribute equally to reduce the

crime

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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268 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

responsible for crime prevention
legislative power
trained personnel
public institutions
police force
judiciary
correctional facilities
maintain law and order
public good
personal accountability
self-defense measures
security systems
vigilant
community watch programs
education on personal security
empower individuals
reduce the risk of becoming victims of crime
synergistic approach
robust governmental measures
proactive steps
collaborative approach
foundation of security
aware and prepared citizenry

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