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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school.

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 is often believed by many professionals that learning an overseas
language
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 is best for children at elementary
school
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 rather than secondary
school
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. In my opinion, I think that studying a foreign
language
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 at the beginning of primary
school
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 can bring more benefits to the youngster and
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its
 advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Learning a foreign
language
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 at the elementary level has a number of key advantages.
First
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 of all, introducing a new
language
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 early helps the kid gain a higher level of proficiency in it,
thus
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, in the near future, it makes him more confident in using the
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.
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, studying an additional
language
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 enhances the child's psychological skills and studies have shown that multilingual people are smarter than monolingual people.
For example
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, Albert Einstein spoke 5 different languages from a young age and he has undoubtedly one of the greatest minds
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of
 the earth.
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 to that, students at the elementary level are so young and they are free from other responsibilities.
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, they do not get much stress from family related works and pressures,
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, I think learning a foreign
language
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 at primary
school
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 is better than secondary. Admittedly, there are some issues involved when children learning multiple languages in primary
school
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. One clear disadvantage is that the child may confuse with a native foreign tongue.
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, they may take a longer time to achieve fluency in their mother tongue. Another negative aspect of adding a new
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 to the primary
school
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 curriculum is that it puts extra pressure on
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child
child's
 mentality because they already have a variety of subjects to learn and introducing a new
language
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 can make the syllabus even heavier. In conclusion,
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 there are drawbacks to introducing additional
language
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 in elementary
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, it is clear that educating children to be multilingual from an early age promotes better
language
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 skills and higher IQ. On balance I would say that parents and teacher need to ensure that the new
language
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 does not become a burden for the kids.
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