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Many people choose to work or live abroad because of the higher standards of living they can find outside their home country. Do you think this brings more advantages or disadvantages to the people who follow this path?

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The standard of living in developed countries is considerably better than that in underdeveloped or developing countries and
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 what prompts most people to emigrate. People who choose to live abroad almost always come from underdeveloped or developing countries where they do not have enough opportunities for career or personal growth. When talented youngsters move abroad, they get the kind of salary that matches their qualifications. They may not get similar opportunities in the
country
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 of their birth. By moving abroad, they will
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 be able to provide
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 class education to their children. Another advantage is the availability of excellent healthcare in the developed
world
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. It is a well-known fact that people in the
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world
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 countries live longer than those in the
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world
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 countries. People who immigrate to these countries may
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 enjoy
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 benefit. On the flip side, when the talented youth
move
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moves
 to other countries in search of better jobs, it creates a dearth of talent in their mother
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. While
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 is a disadvantage, it has another side to it. A large number of Indians now work and live abroad. The money that they sent to their loved ones in India makes a significant contribution to the Indian economy. According to some statistics, annually India receives over 50 billion USD in foreign remittance. That’s a huge amount that can significantly improve the quality of a living in a
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. Foreign remittance,
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, is the backbone of the Kerala economy (a south Indian state) where the literacy and longevity rates are comparable to those in the developed
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. After
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analysing
 both sides of the
situation it
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situation, it
 is felt that moving abroad for a better job has more advantages than disadvantages. Not only the people who immigrate, but
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 the
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 of their birth benefit from
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 trend in more ways than one.
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