Q. Teenagers should not be allowed to use mobile phones at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With the rise in technology, use of mobile phones has increased to a greater
extent specially in
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extent, especially in
extent especially in
teenagers.
However
,
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,
use of cell phones should be
limited expecially
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limited, especially
limited especially
during studies.
This
essay will discuss how
cellphones
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cell phones
affect students in school campus like it causes distractions and lack of self confidence. School is a place for studies and students should pay full attention to what teachers are teaching them. Now if they have a device which distracts them with constant updates and contact with
outside world
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the outside world
it cause
hindrence
something immaterial that interferes with or delays action or progress
hindrance
hindrances
in their education.
For instance
, while an important maths lesson is going on and a student gets a message about his evening basketball play schedule
then
he will be distracted.
Moreover it
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Moreover, it
will affect nearby sitting students
also
with the use of mobile phones. Another important aspect of prohibiting mobile phones in school area is to avoid bullying. Not every
parents
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parent
can afford latest phones and
therefore
students will start comparing with fellow students and it might result
into
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in
lack
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a lack
of self confidence.
In addition
to
this
, students will ask for expensive phones from their parents because of the peer pressure which will affect their home environment.
This
situation might
also
result into fights and dangerous conflicts among students. So for the betterment of students, it is advisable to ban mobile phones in school campus so that they can take education with full concentration and confidence.
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