It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

There is a difference between inherent talents in various
level
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levels, such
levels such
such
as sports or music and trained
talent
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Talent
to make them perfect in that sector. Generally it is believed that students can be taught be equal training in every sector. I
also
experienced
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Experienced
this
example from our own school, where the students were taught to be
musician
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musically
or
sports person
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A sports person
Sports person
. But in these
away they
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away, they
only can learn things physically not by heart. Most of the
time
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Time
it becomes only leisure activity, not their passion.
On the other hand
, some peoples have intrinsic
talent
, got
this
through genetic legacy and that
quality
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Quality
creates a humongous difference from others. Innate
talent
is one’s own gift. The skill that
students
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Students
have been learning for many
years
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year
emits automatically from those who are naturally
talented
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Talented
.
However
, I personally think that
although
teachers provide the same class, method and education
for
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For
all
students but
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students, but
when it comes between nature and nurture,
then
they are conducive to each
other
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Other
. In spite of having natural ability, people
needs
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need
training to become perfect. Actually natural
ability
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Ability
is a
diamond but
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diamond, but
training is required to polish it to make sparkle.
On the other hand
,
training
activity leading to skilled behavior
Training
is useless for the empty vessel. If a person does not have a minute amount of quality,
then
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Then
training in futile for him. So in my opinion, inherent
talent
is better than trained skilled. Because people can make
themselves
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Themselves
good or sometimes better in some
activity but
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activity, but
it needs some natural
talent
to be
excellent
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Excellent
.
Moreover
, natural ability
also need
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also needs
to be polished to exploit their luminosity. A person
can
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Can
be better by hard
working but
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working, but
they cannot meet the level as compared to innate
talent
.
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