It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

There is a difference between inherent talents in various
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such
as sports or music and trained
talent
to make them perfect in that sector.
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it is believed that
students
can be taught
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equal training in every sector. I
also
experienced
this
example from our own school, where the
students
were taught to be
musician
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or sports
person
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. But in
these
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away
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they only can learn things physically not by heart. Most of the time it becomes only
leisure
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activity, not their passion.
On the other hand
, some
peoples
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have intrinsic
talent
, got
this
through genetic legacy and that quality creates a humongous difference from others. Innate
talent
is one’s own gift. The skill that
students
have been learning for many years emits automatically from those who are naturally talented.
However
, I personally think that
although
teachers provide the same class, method and education for all
students
but
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when it comes
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nature and nurture,
then
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they are conducive to each other. In spite of having natural ability, people
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training to become perfect.
Actually
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natural ability is a diamond but training is required to polish it to make sparkle.
On the other hand
, training is useless for the empty vessel. If a person does not have a minute amount of quality,
then
training
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futile for him. So in my opinion, inherent
talent
is better than trained
skilled
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.
Because people
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can make themselves good or sometimes better in some
activity
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but it needs some natural
talent
to be excellent.
Moreover
, natural ability
also
need
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to be polished to exploit their luminosity. A person can be better by hard
working
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but they cannot meet the level as compared to innate
talent
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innate talent
  • Nurture
  • Prodigy
  • Proficiency
  • Deliberate practice
  • Physiological factors
  • Grit
  • Perseverance
  • Cultural norms
  • Structured training
  • Physical predisposition
  • Natural aptitude
  • Dedicated training
  • Societal influence
  • Passion
  • Genetic endowment
  • Skill acquisition
  • Expertise
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Mastery
  • Cognitive abilities
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