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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Railway and road
transport
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 are the most commonly used means of
transport
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 in both the developing and developed
countries
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countries, hence
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 it is only logical to enhance them. To a greater extent, I agree that railways should be given more consideration than roads because of the reasons given below. Trains
transport
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 a larger number of people compared to vehicles
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 making the former cheaper than the latter. A single train can carry more than 100 passengers yet even the big vehicles like buses may not be able to accommodate
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 a big number.
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 to that, trains travel faster than vehicles because railways usually follow a straight path while
roads
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the roads
 have to go around other infrastructure.
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, trains, especially electric ones do not give off fumes that are harmful to the environment. Most
cars particularly
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cars, particularly
 in the developing world produce gas that pollutes the
air which
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air, which
 in turn causes diseases
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 lung cancer. The fact that many railways are designed to pass under the ground makes trains more environmentally friendly and at the same time minimizes space taken up by them. Much as I think railways should be developed more, they are
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 very expensive to construct and maintain whereas roads are less costly. The labour and material used cannot be afforded by most developing countries, so it would not be fair to their governments. In conclusion, most states should consider building more of railways than roads in order to save the environment from pollution and to decrease on the cost incurred by
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 citizens
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