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Some people believe that museums and historic sites should be open for free for children under 18. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, visiting museums and some other historic sites
sounds
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sound
 outdated. Current generations do not value the importance of visiting those places.
Thus
, pupils should be introduced to some historical places and be encouraged to visit them. To make a concrete action, some people think that children aged
below
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under
 18 should be freed to enter the sites. In
this
 essay, I shall provide my thoughts on why I agree with
this
 idea.
To begin
 with, children nowadays are more interested to spend their time on playing video games, streaming movies, and scrolling through social
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
. Spending
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
 much time on those activities can lead to some detrimental anti-social behaviours.
Hence
, we have to encourage children to do a positive activity
instead
,
for example
 visiting museums and several historical places. Children can learn about the past life and value the beauty of archaic artefacts as well. Making it free for school-aged children
to enter
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enter
 those sites is an initial step to gain their interest.
Second
, pupils have not had an income.
Although
 museums and some historical places need the revenue for maintaining the sites, in my personal opinion children should not be charged. Those places can still have revenue streams from the adult tourists and visitors. As it is widely known, it is almost impossible for children
to go
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go
 there alone, they must be supervised by adults, either their teacher or their parents. In conclusion, the declining trend of visiting historical places can be overcome by encouraging people to visit them from
the early
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the earliest
 age. I believe children should not be charged to enter those sites because they have not
enter
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entered
 the productive age. I am certain that the revenue gained from adults accompanying children is more than enough for maintaining the historical places.
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