The qualities that a truly successful person in our modern life has cannot be learned at universities and similar academic institutions. To what extent do you agree?

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It is argued by some people that attributes needed to be successful today cannot be learned in colleges and other educational institutions. I agree with
this
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notion because qualities needed for
success
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are inborn and are developed by the right
upbringing
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.
Firstly
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, the qualities needed for
success
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today are innate.
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, only people with the right genetic
make-up
the way in which someone or something is composed
makeup
can develop qualities
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as intelligence, resilience and high attention span.
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, many famous scientists were born with higher
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intelligence
quotient compared to other people, which is responsible for their being successful.
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, many people attend universities, it is only those who have certain inborn attributes that are successful.
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,
qualities
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the qualities
needed for
success
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in life are developed when a
person
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have
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has
the proper
upbringing
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.
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is due to the fact that a
person
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with the right environmental and
behavioral
of or relating to behavior
behavioural
exposure is likely to form attributes that are essential for
success
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.
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, a
person
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who is surrounded by members of the family and friends that are accomplished would likely be successful compared to a
person
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who does not have these benefits even if both attended the same academic institution.
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, proper
upbringing
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would contribute to the development of qualities seen in accomplished people. In conclusion,
although
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some people are of the view that a
person
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need to attend an academic institution in order to learn important qualities for
success
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, I believe that the qualities needed to be truly successful are developed by an interplay of nature and
upbringing
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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