Some people believe the purpose of prison is to punish, while other would argue that rehabilitation is its primary role. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The purpose of jails
is
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has been
always in a high debate and many thinks that they exist for the correction of criminals.
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, others believe that they are there for disciplining the perpetrators.
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both of these perspectives have their own
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reasons, but
, in my opinion, they should be there as an opportunity for
wrong doers
a person who transgresses moral or civil law
wrongdoers
to rehabilitate themselves. Undoubtedly, there are various reasons for the confinements to be a place for punishment.
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, there are various crimes in the society which are very serious in nature
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as murder and rape and the person who carry out these heinous crimes should not get a chance to be released in the society again. If they are allowed to roam in the community without being punished,
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they could repeat the crime for the
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time.
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, if the convicts are chastised
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it sets an example for the future generation so that they learn what happens if someone chooses a wrong path.
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, the purpose of prison is
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to correct the offenders and there are various explanations behind
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. Primarily, people should always get option for amendments because most of the times people are in the path of crime due to the circumstances they face in their harsh life and eventually they go against the rule.
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, motives behind most of the theft and robberies that
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come
to the court are often due to poverty.
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, it is
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not very certain that the punishment changes
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person, but
could even become more devastating. There are
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lots
of instances where criminals behind bars getting more violent than before due to disciplinary action they get during that time. In conclusion, while there are many reasons which presents the role of confinement as a chastising house, I believe that people should always get a
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chance to alter themselves because there could be countless motives which drives these people toward
incorrect path
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the incorrect path
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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