You have recently bought some camping equipment but it was faulty. You phoned the shop but no action has been taken. Write a letter to the shop maneger. In your letter, -Describe the problem with the equipment -Explain what happened when you phoned the shop -Say what you would like the maneger to do

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing

this

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letter to draw your attention to a faulty item, I bought from your store

last

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week. I want to mention the specific issue with the camping tent, which is leakage in the tent, and the zipper is broken from one end.

Furthermore

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, I

had

Unnecessary verb

apply

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bought a gas stove which

Wrong verb form

was

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working properly

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last

Correct article usage

the last

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day, but now there is some

manfunctioning

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malfunctioning

man functioning

in the flame. I made a call to you on Monday, 10 March 2025, around 12:30 p.m. One of your staff members had received my call, but he said that it was his first day as

sales

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a sales

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salesperson, so he is not very aware of your policies.

Then

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I waited for their response or call back for two days, but there was no response. I would like to have a replacement

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for

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the tent and a refund for the stove. Can you please look into my problem? I will wait for your response. yours sincerely jack

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Coherence and Cohesion

Ensure to provide a clearer description of the specific issues with each item in separate sentences.

Task Achievement

Consider adding more detail about your expectations or how long you're willing to wait for a resolution.

Tone

The letter has a polite and formal tone, which is appropriate for the context.

Task Achievement

You clearly stated the issues with the items, which helps convey the main points effectively.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

164 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

faulty
equipment
camping
manager
describe
problem
malfunctioning
response
replacement
refund
repair service
contact
action
complaint
tent
sleeping bag
issue
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