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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
In present day society, due to the staggering advancement of technology and transport systems, it is common for people to travel to different countries or study and work
oversea
beyond or across the sea
overseas
. Some people believe that the
language
 barriers will engender many social problems, while I disagree with
this
 view because of the proliferation of the internet and the widespread use of some dominant languages nowadays. People tend to attend prestigious universities to gain better job prospects in their later lives in most Asian countries, so there are numerous
language
 learning courses available on the websites for the public. People have easy access to study foreign languages and can improve their speaking skills or communicated skills wherever they want.
Moreover
, if individuals have difficulties to understand or speak foreign languages, they can
also
 use the translation tools
such
 as google or online dictionaries to help them communicate with the local residents. With all these online resources on the Internet, people may adapt themselves to the new countries easier.
In addition
, owing to the accelerated rate of globalization of economic, cultural or political areas, it is imperative for people to learn
second
language
.
For example
, there are a number of English news coverage broadcasted on TV channels in Taiwan, which give people a chance to familiar with foreign languages. Children in Taiwan are
also
 forced to learn English because most important textbooks or journals are both written in English. As for the older generations, it would not be possible for them to memorize or learn
second
language
 because of their physical conditions, but they can make good use of body
language
 when
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 or living in other nations. In my opinion, to learn or speak a foreign is not that
easy but
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easy, but
 people can acquire more knowledge and skills through the Internet or by using appropriate body
language
.
This
 will help individuals not only deal with problems in their
lives but
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lives, but
also
 improve their personal
language
 ability.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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