Development is fast growing, more and more machines are replacing humans. Does the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?. Discuss and give vital example. Write not less than 250 words.
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have several benefits, I Still that they cannot overshadow the drawbacks.
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machines
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Thirdly
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machines
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people
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besides
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For example
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people
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machines
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then
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people
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people
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Rephrase the introduction for clarity. It should clearly state that machines replacing humans is the central point of discussion and your position on it.
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The essay addresses both advantages and disadvantages of machines replacing humans, which demonstrates an understanding of the topic.
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