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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion ? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.

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Parenthood is considered one of the hardest titles to do justice
with
Suggestion
to
. A lot of people are simply lost and
dont
do not
don't
 have enough knowledge to handle the title bestowed upon them. That's why some of us think
its
it is
it's
 necessary that everyone should learn
this
 as a skill and should know how to be a good
parent
, as a part of their formal education. I happen to agree with
this
 opinion.
Firstly
, schooling is almost a mandatory period in the life of most of
world's population
Suggestion
the world's population
. It is
this
 young and impressionable age where the mind is ready to grasp new ideas, quickly. Being a good
parent
 is one of the most necessary requirement for a balanced and healthy household, which makes it the perfect thing to be included in the list of talents to be acquired.
In other words
, schools should
also
 provide the social grooming to succeed in life, along with educational lessons.
Secondly
, to be a good
parent
, a person needs to be social, responsible and mature. All of these traits are absolutely necessary to take care of a child, but
also
 helps
in
Suggestion
with
 the other aspects of life.
For example
, if a teenager knows what is expected of him/her to be a good
parent
, they would make a more focused effort to become an individual that can be a good mother or father.
Lastly
, I believe the world would be a much better place, if every kid would have good parents and
hence
 can get all the love and care that they deserve.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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