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Some people say that Ebooks and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines to what extent do you agree or disagree.

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With the ever advancing electronic technologies, there is increasing belief amongst some people that the traditional newspaper and magazines would be replaced by E-Books in the near future.
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 essay would discuss how it is very likely for the permanent replacement of these traditional ways of reading. To start with, the hard printed issues of newspapers and magazines are a major environmental concern. There is an increase in the global warming in the past 25 years. To print these magazines, a large amount of paper is required. Most of these papers are not even recycled and are usually thrown away.
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, in a research conducted by the Department of
Enviroment
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Environment
 of the Indian Government, it was found that only 15% of the books are printed on recycled papers.
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 fact can be negated by the E-Books as the need of papers is removed.
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, as the requirement of paper is reduced, the production cost of these papers is reduced.
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, most of the E-Books are much cheaper than their counterparts.
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, the cost of a newspaper is generally Rs. 5 whereas these newspapers are sold at just at Rs. 2 online.
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is, hence
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, beneficial to both the consumers and the suppliers as the intermediate costs are decreased. To conclude, it is more
prevalant
most frequent or common
prevalent
 these days to find easier access to
printed version
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the printed version
printed versions
 of newspaper and
magazines but
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magazines, but
 an ever increasing need to preserve our natural resources and the decreasing cost of E-Books sold on the internet can result in a complete swap.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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