In some countries ,there are many social problems involving teenagers .this is because parents spend much of their time at work not at home .Do you agree or disagree?

In
this
era of modernization, rise in crime related to youth is observed among some countries
.
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.
Nowdays
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Nowadays
both parents are earning to meet
social standard
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the social standard
social standards
a social standard
of
this
modern society.
As a result
parent child
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parent, child
bonding is weak and in the presence of latest technology
,
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,
youngsters are more
susciptable
(often followed by 'of' or 'to') yielding readily to or capable of
susceptible
to bad habits
.
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.
I go with the stance that absence of parents in young
children
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children's
child
lives is one of
major reason
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the major reason
major reasons
for prevailing teenage problems in society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social problems
  • teenagers
  • parental absence
  • work-life balance
  • parental guidance
  • peer influence
  • independence
  • community support
  • government initiatives
  • tackle
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