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Some parents want their children to read only serious educational books at all times. They don’t want their children to read any entertainment books because they think it is wast of time. Do you agree or disagree?

#parents #children #books #times #don’t #entertainment #wast #time
Reading books
is
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are
 the only place where, we keep our ego aside and completely submit our
self
 to the vision of the writer. So some parents argue that kids should not
read enternaiment
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read, entertaining
read entertaining
read entertainment
 articles,
instead
 reading only educational novels
everytime
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every time
. In my
opnion
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
, I agree with the statement because knowledgeable books
develops
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develop
 a way to lead a
life
 and
also
 force you to think about
purpose
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the purpose
 of your
life
. To embark upon, Reading educational books, helps children from their early age to become stronger within and it does give
confident
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confidence
confidently
 to live your own
life
 fullest. Educations
articls
nonfictional prose forming an independent part of a publication
articles
article
 does gives a clear picture how to be
desipline
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disciplined
discipline
disciplines
 in
life
, at the same time it gives
immense confident
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an immense confidence
immense confidence
 to be
your
reflexive form of "you"
yourself
self
 and speak with your mind. One of the best
example
Suggestion
examples
 of
this
 kind of book is Author Ian Rand’s Foundahead, In these
last
 four decades it was the most famous
self
 helped book to be strong and
confidents
having or marked by confidence or assurance
confident
confidence
 to face the real world for
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
.
Additionally
, at
very young age it
Suggestion
a very young age, it
a very young age it
 is better to know your purpose in
life
. We are in a generation, where the ambition defines a person.Some books
really fasinates
Suggestion
really fascinate
really fascinates
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
 to know their best
intrest
a sense of concern with and curiosity about someone or something
interest
interests
 and
then
 to become expertise and make a bright future.
For
example I
Accept comma addition
example, I
 read a book called “A monk who sold
ferarri
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Ferrari
” by Robin
sharma
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Sharma
.
This
 novel helps us to question our
self
, what we want and for what we are running if we don’t have any big ambitions. To conclude, There are books which are very much
intresting
Suggestion
more interesting
interesting
 than
entertaiment
an activity that is diverting and that holds the attention
entertainment
 articles. These
fasicatinating
 books can enhance confident and focus towards their goal for children.
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