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nowadays University education is very expensive some people say that universities should reduce disease especially for less fortunate students of those coming from rural areas to what extent do you agree or disagree with the statements?

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Education plays an important role in developing the personality of an individual.Some inhabitants are of the view that pupils who belong to rural and are not financially stable, they must
begivenlow
 cost higher education. I agree that education should be cheap so that everyone get knowledge and take benefit from it. Undoubtedly
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hike in fee
structureresults
Suggestion
structure results
 in better infrastructure and students
get
Suggestion
gets
 latest knowledge about their field of studies.
Moreover
,
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,
well-equipped laboratories enhance their practical skills.Some courses like computer and science subjects should be expensive to provide new technical techniques.
However
, more teenagers who belong to down-trodden families, are not able
tojoin
Suggestion
to join
such
 expensive courses.Government should aid these people financially, to make society more literate.Various non-governmental organizations can
also
 contribute in providing free education to deserving candidates.
Furthermore
, some individuals belong to rural and suburb areas and for them, charges of
graduation
Suggestion
graduate
 courses are quite high because they have to pay for hostel
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,
 mess and other hostel facilities.
Therefore
, management
fix
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fixes
 quotas for them and reserve some seats for those people
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,
 so that they are able to join these schools at ease. To conclude, higher authorities
,
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,
 deans and other social groups should support people economically to get them graduated and help the nation to become
better place
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a better place
better places
 to live in.
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