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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve traffic and pollution problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective.

#price #petrol #traffic #pollution #measures
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It is argued by some people that the most important way to solve
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 congestion and pollution is to increase the price of
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. I agree with
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 notion because a
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 would make the daily
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 of personal cars on roads unattractive, while the development of public
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 system is another effective way to solve
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 problem.
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 of all, a higher cost of
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 would make the daily
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 of automobiles unattractive.
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 would be due to the exorbitant cost of maintaining personal cars.
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, people would seek alternative means of transit, reducing the numbers of cars on roads as well as noise and exhaust from them.
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, following the
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 in the pump price of petrol in Nigeria, in 2012, many car owners left their cars at home, reducing the number of vehicles on major roads, transit time, noise and exhaust from cars.
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, a
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 in the cost of gasoline would result in less
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 jams and pollutions from vehicles.
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, the government should develop a good public
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 system in order to reduce problems on the roads. Through an effective public
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 scheme, many people would forgo the
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 of personal cars for modes of
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such
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 as underground trains, bicycles and energy efficient buses. The resultant effects would be less pressure on roads, faster flow of
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 and less pollution of the environment. In conclusion,
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hike
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 would discourage the daily
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 of personal cars and it is an essential approach to reducing
traffic
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 and pollutants from vehicles. More so, I believe that a good public
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 scheme would
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 be effective in running
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 on
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the roads
 along with pollution.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discourage
  • Incentivize
  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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