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Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome?

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Environmental,
population
 and
education
 systems are changing rapidly around the world. These changes pose significant challenges to countries around the
world especially
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world, especially
 in my
country
, India.
This
 essay will discuss the challenges faced by my
country
 and how these can be overcome. One of the most crucial problems my
country
 faces is its high growth rate of
population
. India has over 1 billion people already with limited
resources making
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resources, making
 it difficult to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 even the basic needs of its populace.
This
 adversely
effects
have an effect upon
affects
 the environment as the natural resources are used up at a faster rate which has already started creating deficit for the same. Deforestation is rampant in order to expand the
cities causing
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cities, causing
 rain and water shortage. As, agriculture is negatively affected due to
this
, people in villages are moving to cities,
thus
 creating a vicious circle of
further
 resource depletion. In the
next
 ten years the
country
’s main focus needs to be reducing its
population
.
This
 the government should do by creating policies that encourage fewer children like
for example
 tax benefits for people with two and less kids.
Although
 India produces some of the greatest minds in engineering and medicine, the poor in my
country
 have none or very limited access to basic
education
. In the
next
 ten years, unless and until the public school system improves, the
country
 will continue to face challenges in terms of the large gap between the classes and
masses
Suggestion
the masses
.
Also
 the government should have stringent rules pertaining to cost of private
education
 which is becoming unattainable to the middle class mostly due to greed. In conclusion, India as a
country
 should focus mainly on reducing its
population
 and creating better
education
 systems for the same.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Ecosystem
  • Renewable resources
  • Urbanization
  • Demographics
  • Healthcare system
  • Pension crisis
  • Curriculum development
  • Digital literacy
  • E-learning platforms
  • Lifelong learning
  • Public policy
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Green technology
  • Population density
  • Generational equity
  • Economic disparity
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