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Discuss the positive and negative impacts of technology on society. Provide relevant examples where possible and draw a conclusion.

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Modern
technology
 has opened the doors which did not even exist before. With the advancement in
technology
, the world has witnessed
materialization
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the materialization
 of the ideas that were once thought as impossible.
However
, like all other things, there are pros and cons
to
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of
 the
technology
 as well. We will discuss both perspectives. Mechanization developed
over the
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over, the
 time has increased the ease of getting things done to an exponential level. With the recent advancements, one person can do
tasks
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the tasks
 of multiple people these days; that too with increased efficiency.
However
, as a byproduct,
this
 has been the very reason for booming
unemployement
the state of being unemployed or not having a job
unemployment
 ratio. Statistics suggest that, Toyota factory in Karachi, which was once run by more than a thousand employees has drastically reduced the numbers to hundreds. Communications, with
such
 innovations in
technology
, have seen a whole new phase. The speed of the communication and the modes available have seen the excrescence that was never
immagined
form a mental image of something that is not present or that is not the case
imagined
 before.
On the contrary
,
such
 engagement has played its role in social disengagement.
Contineous
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Continuous
 connection to the offices has
distrubed
spread out or scattered about or divided up
distributed
destroyed
 the work-life balance of working professionals these days. As per a survey conducted in Lahore, 85% of people are found to be somehow engaged in businesses
inspite
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in spite
 of their off hours and holidays.
Although
 there are numerous benefits of the modernization that
technology
 has brought into peoples lives, there are advantages and disadvantages to it. The pros and cons
to
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of
 it do
counter-balance
a weight that balances another weight
counterbalance
eachother
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each other
 very well.
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