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Today more people are travelling than ever before. why is this the case? what are the benefits of travelling for the traveler? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Now a days
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Nowadays
, the ratio of the people who are travelling has raised as compared to before and
this
 is because there are several advantages involved.
Firstly
, I would like to explain the advantages
in
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of
 travelling like people in
present scenario
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the present scenario
 are more interested in going to
foreign country
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a foreign country
foreign countries
 as they can earn more as well as they can explore a new place.
For example
,
this
 case is mostly seen in software companies as some industries in
foreign country
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foreign countries
 need people from local places for some project works and so people choose to work there as they can get more pay when compared to their usual and
moreover
 they like to experience a different lifestyle by staying there.
Secondly
, in present days cinema plays an important role in the world as people like to have entertainment
inorder
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in order
 to feel better from their vexed life as well as hectic work schedule and so keeping
this
 in mind directors and producers are more keen
in
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on
 shooting the movie in
best locations
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the best locations
 with good
scenaries
something that remunerates
salaries
sceneries
, visual effects,
screen play
a script for a film including dialogue and descriptions of characters and sets
screenplay
 e.t.c.
and
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And
inspite
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in spite
 of that they need to travel to different places which got
best
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the best
 view.
For instance
, by shooting in a foreign
locations
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location
 in famous places they can get good collections and because of that people involved in the movie like
cast
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the cast
 and crew will
along travel
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travel along
.
Therefore
, in my view I feel travelling has got more benefits.
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