Many people believe that hierarchy developed on basis of cast followed since thousand of years is the right way to run the society. Up to what extent do you agree?

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Castiesm

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Castes

is prevailing

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has prevailed

in several prominent countries since ancient times. It is the burning question of the

day whether

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day, whether

being

castiest

entailing great loss or sacrifice

costliest

contest

is legit or it should be stopped by the policy makers. I will contemplate upon the predicaments that people have to combat, while they adhere to

castiesm

and will

also

look at the perspective of those, who assert the

otherwise

. To set in, sticking to tribalism in

this

modern world foster the differences between various communities.

Besides

, it will not only produce the bitter rifts in

individuals

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individual

individuals'

individual's

relationships but

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relationships, but

also

built an unbridgeable gap

among

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between

them.

Furthermore

communalism

breeds to hatred in people, which make them

lag

produce laughter

laugh

in all but every walk of human life, as enmity hinder the development of that particular society. On top of that, history had been evident of communal riots out of cast based prejudice,

thus

casteism

ought to be put to an end by the authorities. To continue,

castiest

is built

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were built

was built

by our ancestors all but

thousand years

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a thousand years

ago, on the basis of one's occupation.

In addition

, It was made to differentiate the jobs, which not only assist people to be adroit in a specific profession but

also

enable them to carry forward their skills inculcated by their forefathers.

Although

this

rule empowers

scores

Suggestion

score

of individuals in its infancy,

however

, now it turned out to be a bane owing to the disparity being built amidst communities. To sum up, following

castiesm

social status or position conferred by a system based on class

castes

is, by no means, seems wiser to me

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as there are several abysmal effects associated with

this

Additionally

, the onus is on the government, that they should halt the racism completely as it is sticking to the humanity like a termite.

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Many people believe that hierarchy developed on basis of cast followed since thousand of years is the right way to run the society. Up to what extent do you agree?

Fully explain your ideas

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Some experts think that all students should learn musical instruments. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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