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Some feel that countries should produce most of the food that is eaten in their country and import as little as possible.

In recent years, there has been a debate about whether
countries
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 should aim for self-sufficiency in
food
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 production or rely on
imports
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.
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 some argue that nations must produce most of their own
food
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, I believe that a balanced approach combining domestic production with strategic
imports
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 is more practical. Those in
favor
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 of self-sufficiency contend that producing the majority of
food
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 locally ensures national
food
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 security. In times of global crises,
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 as pandemics or trade disruptions,
countries
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 that rely heavily on
imports
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 may face shortages.
Moreover
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, focusing on domestic agriculture protects local farmers and preserves rural livelihoods.
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, supporting small-scale farmers helps maintain employment in the agricultural sector and contributes to social stability.
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, reducing reliance on imported
food
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 can decrease the environmental impact associated with long-distance transportation.
On the other hand
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, expecting
countries
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 to be entirely self-sufficient can be economically inefficient. Some nations lack the suitable climate or soil conditions to grow all types of
food
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, meaning they would incur higher costs if forced to produce everything domestically. Strategic
imports
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 allow
countries
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 to take advantage of comparative advantages, offering consumers a wider variety of affordable and high-quality
food
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.
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, tropical fruits are typically imported to temperate
countries
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, providing nutritional diversity that would be impossible to achieve
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.
Furthermore
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, global trade in
food
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 strengthens international relationships and contributes to economic growth. In conclusion,
while
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 there are clear benefits to producing
food
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 locally, an overly rigid focus on self-sufficiency is neither necessary nor feasible. A combination of domestic production and selective
imports
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 ensures
food
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 security, economic efficiency, and consumer choice, allowing
countries
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 to meet both practical and social needs effectively.

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Your answer is good and you state a clear view. Try to restate your view strongly in the last sentence of the conclusion.
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The flow of ideas is good. Use more simple sign words (and, but, also, however) to show how ideas link.
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Your examples help. Add one or two more exact facts or numbers to back your point.
argument
Clear balanced view with strong defence for both sides.
structure
Good organise of intro, body, and conclusion.
presentation
Exchange of ideas with good use of contrast between sides.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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