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There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

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It is true that a rich variety of musical styles can be found around the world.
Music
 is a vital
part
 of all human cultures for a range of reasons, and I would argue that traditional
music
 is more important than modern, international
music
.
Music
 is something that accompanies all of us throughout our lives. As children, we are taught songs by our parents and teachers as a means of learning language, or simply as a form of enjoyment. Children delight in singing with others, and it would appear that the act of singing in a group creates a connection between participants, regardless of their age. Later in life, people’s musical preferences develop, and we come to see our favourite songs as
part
 of our life
stories
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story
.
Music
 both expresses and arouses emotions in a way that words alone cannot. In short, it is difficult to imagine life without it. In my opinion, traditional
music
 should be valued over the international
music
 that has become so popular. International pop
music
 is often catchy and fun, but it is essentially a commercial product
that is
 marketed and sold by business people. Traditional
music
,
by contrast
, expresses the culture, customs and history of a country. Traditional styles,
such
 as
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)..., connect us to the past and form
part
 of our cultural identity. It would be a real pity if pop
music
 became so predominant that these national styles disappeared. In conclusion,
music
 is a necessary
part
 of human existence, and I believe that traditional
music
 should be given more importance than international
music
.
Submitted by SREEKANTH AMBAVARAPU on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emotional release
  • cultural significance
  • globalization
  • cultural exchange
  • technology
  • preservation
  • cultural heritage
  • social cohesion
  • expression
  • consumption
  • production
  • traditional music
  • international music
  • diversity
  • identity
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