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You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter say where you think you left the papers explain why they are so important tell the manager what you want him/her to do

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Dear Mr Anthony I'm Ravshanova Mushtariy and I am writing in order to inform you that I left some important
papers
 in the hotel that you are the manager of.I think that I left them in a conference room on the second floor.I think they can be found in
an
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 exact spot that I was seated in.My
papers
 were in a yellow folder,on the cover,it was written "RM COMPANY".
However
 I'm not so sure, so it would be great if you could check the bedroom that I stayed.The number of the hotel room is 9,just in case.Maybe I placed them
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 a shelf
that is
 placed near the bed. These
papers
 are so important
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 me
therefore
 there is plenty of information and some crucial documents related to work.Without these
papers
,I might end up in big trouble.
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 I might
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 my job so I hope my documents can be found. I would appreciate it if you could send it to my address as soon as you
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 it or if you would contact me I would arrange to pick them up.
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 I will leave my address below and my number,so you
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 call me if my documents are found. My number:09032400 Best regards Ravshanova Mushtariy
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coherence cohesion
Try breaking down your thoughts into shorter sentences to improve readability and coherence.
task achievement
Make sure to double-check your grammar and punctuation for a polished final draft.
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Your letter is respectful and the tone is professional, which is appropriate for the recipient.
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You effectively provided all necessary details: where the papers might be, why they are important, and what you want the manager to do.
coherence cohesion
Good use of paragraphs to separate different ideas and requests.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Dear Sir/Madam,
  • I am writing to inform you that I believe I left some important papers at your hotel.
  • To the best of my recollection, I left the papers in the conference room.
  • These papers are of utmost importance as they contain confidential business information.
  • I kindly request that you or your staff check the conference room and securely send the papers to my address.
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