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Environment is getting worse who are responsible ? is it government agree or disagree

#environment #government
It seems to be an increasing widespread concern that our environmental problems are worse and worse in any part of the world and we must action on them have to protect it from them before it becomes too late. Some people suppose that environmental protection is only feasible at a global level. I disagree with
this
 point of view. We cannot deny that the role of governments and organizations is extremely important in protecting our planet and there are things that citizens unable to do, but
government
Suggestion
the government
 can. An example of
that is
 the budget of programs to fight against the climate change is so enormous that an
individuals
Suggestion
individual
 cannot afford.
Besides
, when it comes to managing enterprises to circumscribe the quantity of emissions from factories, it is the governments from various continents who discuss and produce accords.
Such
 as the 1992 United Nation convention against climate change and Paris agreement 2015. We cannot deny that the role of governments and organizations in protecting our planet is extremely important and there are things that citizens are unable to do, but governments can. An example of
that is
 the budget for programs to fight against climate change is so enormous that individuals cannot afford.
Besides
, when it comes to managing enterprises to circumscribe the quantity of emissions from factories, it is the governments from various continents who discuss and produce accords
such
 as the 1992 United Nation Framework Convention against Climate Change and Paris Agreement in 2015.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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