Some young people are leaving countryside to live in cities or towns, it leaves only old people in countryside. What are the problems of this issue? What can be done to solve this problem?

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Young people are the future of the country. It is irrefutable to say that some
youth
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are leaving
countryside
Suggestion
the countryside
to live in cities or towns. Whereas, only old people left in
country side
Suggestion
the country side
. I would like to discuss the problems of the given
statement
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statement, furthermore
furthermore
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, provide the solution of the mention topic. People have dreams that they have
big house
Suggestion
a big house
big houses
,
high
Suggestion
higher
education and good
faclities
a building or place that provides a particular service or is used for a particular industry
facilities
,
although
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irrespective of the place they live.Nowadays, some
youth
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are migrate
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has migrated
to cities or town because education purpose
.
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.
Young people have
desire
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a desire
the desire
to get
better educaton
Suggestion
a better education
better education
so that they get a white collar job.
Moreover
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, They want high tech
faclities
a building or place that provides a particular service or is used for a particular industry
facilities
, high living standard and explore
.
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.
Almost every countryside people do farming and
youth
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have family pressure to take the responsibility of
farming
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farming, although
although
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, some
youth
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have
differnt aim
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a different aim
different aim
such
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as doctor, Scitenist and many more.
On the other hand
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old people live in
countryside
Suggestion
the countryside
. They are various
reason
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reasons
for
that
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that, such
such
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as
generation gap
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the generation gap
, modern
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
. The old people
knows
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know
about farming and in cities rarely people do farming. The cities are well developed, thoughts are
futurestic
of or relating to futurism
futuristic
futurists
. In the
country side
rural regions
countryside
environment is totally different. So, to solve these problems,
goverment
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the government
government
should take some steps. Provide free internet services, free online coaching classes and build modern infrastructure. Due to internet services,
youth
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will get the explore as well as knowledge for the career
orientent
adjusted or located in relation to surroundings or circumstances; sometimes used in combination
orientated
, For
old
Suggestion
older
people provide internet for farming and education about
current situation
Suggestion
the current situation
or facilities which are available in the cities.
There fore
Suggestion
Therefore
, these can be done to solve the problem.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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