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There has been a great increase in the number and varieties of online courses available to adults. This has been welcomed as a great opportunity by many students. However, other students see these classes as less effective than classroom teaching. What are the advantages and disadvantages of studying an online course.

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The recent upsurge in the amount of online classes available to adults has been viewed by some pupil as a welcomed development, while others
believes
Suggestion
believe
 classroom teaching is much more productive.
Consequently
, the merits of online classes
such
 as convenience, effective management of time and resources, as well as the lack of physical presence
superceed
take the place or move into the position of
supersede
 any drawback it might have.
To begin
 with, one prime benefit of
online course
Suggestion
online courses
the online course
an online course
 is in the convenience with which one can learn. A student can sit in the comfort of their home while class is ongoing. In fact,
this
 can be in the bedroom not necessarily a study.
In addition
, online classes affords the opportunity of making good use of time and resources
such
 as money.
Furthermore
, daily schedules can be planned around the classes, while pupils who are mostly adults can seek for employment opportunities to foot their school bills.
For instance
, a survey conducted by the National Student Union in 2019 revealed that 80% of adults running online courses are
also
 gainfully employed. On the flip side, studying online is not without
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 demerits. One of
such
 drawbacks is the lack of physical interaction between the teachers and the
students which
Accept comma addition
students, which
 is being enjoyed in the classroom. It is widely believed that so much knowledge can be garnered from the tutor's body language. More so, knowledge sharing amongst pupils can be better achieved via classroom teachings and
subsequently
, extra classes
such
 as tutorials can be organized. To conclude, online classes are plagued with demerits
such
 as lack of physical contact and interaction
that is
 being enjoyed during
class room
a room in a school where lessons take place
classroom
 teachings despite its obvious benefits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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