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In many countries, more money is spent on transport system in the cities. In contrast, very little is spent in rural areas. What are the effects of this and what can be done to solve this problem?

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In most of the
nations
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nation
,
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,
more financial help is given to
transport
 systems of urban cities.
However
, very less is given to rural areas.In
this
 essay I am going to discuss the consequences of
this
 and the solutions to overcome
this
problem
. To start with
,
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,
one of the
problem
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problems
 can occur because of spending
alot
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a lot
 of
money
 on
transport
 system in urban cities are less
development
 of villages.Much is needed for the
development
 of rural places but with the spending of more
money
 on
cities
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city
cities'
development
 is effected through
this
.Another
problem
,
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,
occur due to
spending
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the spending
 of
money
on
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in
 rural cities is pollution in these places.As more and more
transport
 system causes causes more pollution
problem
. As there is a
problem
 there will be some solutions too.I would like to suggest the solution is that
government
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the government
governments
 should make ways to spend
money
 on village
transport
 system
there by
by that means or because of that
thereby
 there
wil
the capability of conscious choice and decision and intention
will
 be more
development
 needed. To
conclude I
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conclude, I
 would like to say that
transport
 systems is needed much In villages than in cities and through some important solutions we can overcome
this
 issue.
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