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The death penalty is the best way to control and reduce serious crime. To what extent do you agree?

#death #penalty #control #crime
Owing to the upsurge of the incidence of crime
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,
 may believe that the punishment for any serious offence
comitted
bound or obligated, as under a pledge to a particular cause, action, or attitude
committed
 is death
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.
 While
this
 Is may serve as a serious warning to those who wish to commit
crime
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a crime
crimes
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,
 in my
opinion I
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opinion, I
 opine that other short term punishment should be introduced for the following reasons
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Firstly
, when
short term penalty
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the short term penalty
 should be
giving
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given
 to avail the
criminals
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criminal's
criminal
 opportunity to realise their mistake and become better individual after they are released from the jail sentence.
For
instance research
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instance, research
 has shown that many who
spend short time
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spend a short time
 in the prison become better people in the society.
This
 is probably because they learn their lessons and eventually use themselves as
example
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an example
 to others.
Secondly
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,
 During their limited stay in the prison
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,
 they could learn vocational skills
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.
this
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This
 they will fall back on when they are eventually released and
this
 in turn will add to the economic value
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.
For example
 a recent study in Nigeria has shown that 40 to 60% of people who are imprisoned for a short period of time learn hand work which keeps them occupied and gives them a source of income which made them fall into crime
albinitio
. In conclusion,
Although
 health as a final decision for those who engage in serious vices
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,
 in my
opinion I
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opinion, I
 think they should be punished for a short time and release as they could add to the economic growth and
also
 serve as a good example to the
up coming
of the relatively near future
upcoming
 generation.

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